Short Sentences

Do you have too many short sentences in your writing?

Well-written essays feature sentences of varying lengths to make the writing more interesting and energetic. Using too many short sentences can make your ideas sound overly simplistic and your writing sound choppy.

Could you combine some of your short sentences to make them smoother?

Original:

Tomorrow is the Sadie Hawkin's Dance. The girls ask the boys. I want to ask Noah to go with me. I am afraid he will say no. I will feel embarrassed. Fear of rejection shouldn't stop me. I should do what I want. But I don't want to be the laughing stock of the school.

Improved:

Tomorrow is the Sadie Hawkin's Dance where the girls ask the boys. I want to ask Noah to go with me, but I will feel embarrassed if he says no. Fear of rejection shouldn't stop me from doing what I want, but I don't want to be the laughing stock of the school.

Original:

There are many beautiful places in the United States. The Grand Canyon is my favorite. It is located on the border between Arizona and Utah. The Grand Canyon has wonderful hiking. You can hike from one rim to the other in two days. The river in the bottom of the canyon boasts whitewater rafting. The Grand Canyon has many different kinds of wildlife.

Improved:

Of the many beautiful places in the United States, the Grand Canyon (located on the border between Arizona and Utah) is one of my favorites. You can hike from one rim of the canyon to the other, go whitewater rafting, or view different kinds of wildlife.

Good short sentences

Short sentences may be effective in some instances. By using a short sentence or single word sentence, you can emphasize what you are saying.

For example, in the paragraph above you might want to emphasize one particular aspect of the Grand Canyon. Let's say that you want to emphasize whitewater rafting.

Of the many beautiful places in the United States, the Grand Canyon (located on the border between Arizona and Utah) is one of my favorites. There are many different activities you can enjoy there, including hiking, wildlife viewing, and whitewater rafting. Whitewater indeed! The river that runs through the bottom of the canyon offers spectacular rafting.